looking for beta for Transfiguration...round deux

Sadly, our dear le_culdesac has had a change in her schedule and is therefore unable to complete the beta as we had hoped. T_T (Thanks for all the work so far chica! It was truly a pleasure to work with you. :DDDD)

In the light of this, buoy and I are requesting beta assistance from any kind soul who have time and interest to do the following:

★suggest alternative word usage, correct grammar, etc (technical stuff)
★give opinion on characterisation, plot progression, etc
★point out the "???" and "!!!" parts encountered

(As with last time, I am trying to not ask in kirkspock because I want to keep the whole thing low-profile....)

looking for beta for Transfiguration...round deux

Sadly, our dear le_culdesac has had a change in her schedule and is therefore unable to complete the beta as we had hoped. T_T (Thanks for all the work so far chica! It was truly a pleasure to work with you. :DDDD)

In the light of this, buoy and I are requesting beta assistance from any kind soul who have time and interest to do the following:

★suggest alternative word usage, correct grammar, etc (technical stuff)
★give opinion on characterisation, plot progression, etc
★point out the "???" and "!!!" parts encountered

(As with last time, I am trying to not ask in kirkspock because I want to keep the whole thing low-profile....)

N年后某些人的童年会和我的一样被崩坏的

茕蝶：雾风被诈尸了
铃铛：.................................................
茕蝶：车田编剧的风魔后续，果然还是一点长进没有= =
铃铛：orrrrrrzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
茕蝶：风魔的死人全部都……参见冥界篇 - -|||||
铃铛：.......................................................那么至少有一个好消息就是我们可以继续HAPPY地YY龙雾了？= =
茕蝶：就连圣战的那些人也被拿出来卖了……伊达总司啊>_<

( 风魔小次郎：柳生暗杀帖 )

另外附送关于AB的吐糟：
茕蝶：你说N年后会不会又来一个新*火影忍者？
茕蝶：这种事情，前有圣斗士和星座宫，现有网王………………
铃铛：…………………………那也真的是N年以后了…………你看看现在这个……望不到头（？）啊……
茕蝶：其实我觉得快扯完了…………吧？OTZ
铃铛：大概………………？之前谁说的有第三部来着…………………………
茕蝶：从剧情的角度，快图穷匕见了？当然，按照AB这种一场打架要画一两个月的速度………………
铃铛：从AB的角度，快黔驴技穷了……不对，他已经黔驴技穷了！
茕蝶：hohoho
铃铛：你看最近的漫画了？
茕蝶：火影漫画什么的，最讨厌了！
铃铛：喷死~我脑补了无数个版本的这个句子，一瞬间哦

顺便又附送：
黑历史太黑了啊啊啊啊啊啊啊啊啊啊啊……………………
大家都欺负我。泪奔。

N年后某些人的童年会和我的一样被崩坏的

茕蝶：雾风被诈尸了
铃铛：.................................................
茕蝶：车田编剧的风魔后续，果然还是一点长进没有= =
铃铛：orrrrrrzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
茕蝶：风魔的死人全部都……参见冥界篇 - -|||||
铃铛：.......................................................那么至少有一个好消息就是我们可以继续HAPPY地YY龙雾了？= =
茕蝶：就连圣战的那些人也被拿出来卖了……伊达总司啊>_<

( 风魔小次郎：柳生暗杀帖 )

另外附送关于AB的吐糟：
茕蝶：你说N年后会不会又来一个新*火影忍者？
茕蝶：这种事情，前有圣斗士和星座宫，现有网王………………
铃铛：…………………………那也真的是N年以后了…………你看看现在这个……望不到头（？）啊……
茕蝶：其实我觉得快扯完了…………吧？OTZ
铃铛：大概………………？之前谁说的有第三部来着…………………………
茕蝶：从剧情的角度，快图穷匕见了？当然，按照AB这种一场打架要画一两个月的速度………………
铃铛：从AB的角度，快黔驴技穷了……不对，他已经黔驴技穷了！
茕蝶：hohoho
铃铛：你看最近的漫画了？
茕蝶：火影漫画什么的，最讨厌了！
铃铛：喷死~我脑补了无数个版本的这个句子，一瞬间哦

顺便又附送：
黑历史太黑了啊啊啊啊啊啊啊啊啊啊啊……………………
大家都欺负我。泪奔。